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Again, a trip down memory lane. The most desirable opportunity at work (an abroad trip) was being contemplated to be cancelled after everything was almost fixed. I was too sad at that time and did what helps me the most, write. I have never penned a poem apart from this from what I remember. I don’t think I am good at poems, but would love some feedback as that is how one can grow. I did end up taking that work trip to singapore for a month, so yay to that.
Desirous, treacherous, vicious heart. Why did you hope or this would never start?
Caged with tall fences around, still you peeped into that beautiful soul. This is preposterous, I want to cry foul.
Now, this heathen heart wants to abandon me for him? Oh but he won’t accept you, for you, my heart, are too dim.
Unbidden and clueless, if this is how you had to fall. Why did I even guard you at all?
You cry and bleed, I feel the pain. Oh yes! How lovely it is to be this insane.
Squirm all you want my heart, in this unpleasant gloom, then you have to get back in the cage before the impending doom.
Don’t flutter or hope without cause, never again on my sleeve you will pause.
Love, you must, but please do not hope. Consequences of that are ill fated, so nope.
Now we both are in complete and utter despair, oh was it worth it, all that fanfare?
In case some people need context, this poem is about how heart expects and then ends up getting disappointed. Expectations hurt. Thank you for reading 🙂
such a beautiful poem 😘💓
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Are you serious? 🤭
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yes, very much
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So well done, my friend 🤗🖤. Beautiful writing…truly!!!
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Thank you so so much, this means a lot to me 🙂
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It’s indeed heartbreaking when things don’t go as planned or as you want it…and that’s truly captured in the poem…so good job 👌❤️
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I actually never get my hopes high, in fear of getting hurt so it was really a hard time. Thank you so much, I am genuinely happy that this poem makes sense 🥺
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Yeah I get that, when you’re heartbroken, you’re afraid to hope again ☹️😐
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You understand things beautifully 🙂
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Been there done that 😛
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i dont know anything about poetry and never really write it either but this def has some sort of rythm. i wish i could give you better feedbck on the poetry but i do like it!!
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Haha I am happy reading that it made sense and you liked it 🙂
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This was amazing great job! 💗
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Omg yay. Thank you 😊
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You should keep writing those. 😊
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🥺🥺 this means a lot, I will try
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always no
and so
tired of me
and i see
i of them
as well
do tell
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👏👏👏 thank you.
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This is awesome, Pooja!!
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Thank you so much, John! 🙂
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Excellently written, ma’am! You’re very welcome!
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One catches the essence of the pain and anguish of expectations belied from your words for sure..if only all of us could keep the expectations low, then returns will be always high🙂 but tough task
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Thank you so much, Shammi. I think if essence is conveyed, that’s a fair jon done. Ahh, keeping expectations low and being nonchalant about things that matter is something I have been trying to work on for years now!
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😊👍
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Hahahaha it’s like a nursery teacher teaching a child what not do. I liked it, the poem,
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Hahahahahha wowww what analogy 🤣
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Would you be interested in reading my poetry blog?
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Absolutely 🙂
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https://moonlightandhowlsinthedistance.wordpress.com
Hope you like it.
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I will surely check it out in a bit.
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Did you enjoy it? I struggle with this stuff.
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Hey, I did check it then but not completely thanks to my procrastination. However now it says deleted? Can you give me a fresh link?
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I deleted it.
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Whyyyy?
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I struggle with it and it wasn’t getting hardly any attention. I might do something later on. But poetry is such a hard thing. It’s very subjective and it’s a very acquired taste. Plus, mine is yet an exceptional acquired taste.
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I respect your decision but you should let others decide and not be so hard on yourself:)
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🤦♂️ I struggle with poetry. I’ve had 4-5 poetry blogs.
I just can’t understand those who have huge blogs and everyone loves them.
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Disappointment is discouraging but it isnt the end. I love this poem.
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Wow. So nicely put, i love your positivity. Thank you.
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So beautiful
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Thank you so much! 🙂
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